Does this sound like a good story?

Question

Rachel Moral and her family leave without a trace, leaving the small community’s minds reeling with questions. Why would the seemingly perfect family just…disappear?
Isabella Veswa and Jason Kren are determined to find out what happened to their friend, no madder what. They leave home with to follow Rachel’s cryptic clues through abandoned houses to dark forests to a seemingly haunted Opera House!



Does this sound like anything else? Yeah yeah Pretty Little Liars, I know. Whats the girls name in that? I get the feeling it may just be rachel; I don't mind changing THAT
The book is aimed for 10-13 year olds

Answer 1

Theres no rachel in pretty little liars. It doesn't totally sound like that...sorta ish.... and it sounds like an okay plot, but sounds much more behind why they are so desperate to leave, other than the fact that it needs more details it sounds way coolll

Answer 2

I know this questions already been answered but still I had to say this 😂 pretty little liars is not aimed at 10-13 year olds, it handles quite mature issues and has some language that a ten year old DEFINATELY should not know. Sorry I'm not trying to be annoying but I just thought this was a good idea to get this out there :)

Answer 3

In addition to Pretty Little Liars (the girl's name was Alison, btw), this plot reminds me of "Paper Towns" by John Green, where a missing girl left clues for her friends to find which leads to some cave-like dwelling.



The plot does sound catchy! I would read it :D



~Miss Pretty Little Liar

Answer 4

This is an amazing plot I would totally read that :)



Nice job !

Answer 5

Are there like laser robots or something? because that would be cool.

Answer 6

matter*



It's a tad unoriginal, but maybe, you could make it work.