Can you help me with my story plot?

Question

warning - long question follows.

Originally, the plot for the side-project story I'm writing was going to be this:
Years ago, the Cruenti (a race of blood-sucking parasites evolved from humans) and a human activist group, the Restorers, were wiped out during a war against each other. Somehow, in amongst this war, a Cruentus and a Restorer found love and produced a half-Cruentus-half-Human baby girl, Hero. Hero Laker grows up with her human grandmother, Cross, after her parents die. Cross was a Restorer in her youth, and had a chip implanted in her which enabled her to seek out and pinpoint Cruenti. 17 years after the war ended, Cross tells Hero that she knows there are still many Cruenti in hiding, and she is sure that they are plotting revenge. Cross instructs Hero to get close to a Cruentus boy at her school, Broden Huntre, to find out where the Cruentus are and put a stop to them. Hero begins to use Broden to her advantage, but they form an unlikely friendship and this begins to cause problems, as Hero has to decide whether she should stop using Broden, tell him the truth and risk losing him, or carry on using him, not tell him the truth and risk losing him.

But that idea didn't go to well. I change it up a bit so that Hero was completely human, Broden knew her story, and they were not seeking hidden Cruenti, but rather looking for an item which the Cruenti and the Restorers were fighting over. While I was doing a little bit of character profiling, I dreamed up some Cruentus characters [Holden, Arbor, Aspen, Winter and Ember] which I grew attached to. In order to use them in my story, I decided I had to change it up again. I made all the Cruentus characters into a family [Holden = father, Arbor = mother, Aspen = eldest son, Winter = eldest daughter, Broden = youngest son/protagonist, Ember = youngest daughter].

I was, at last, content. Until, of course, I realised that my plot was weak.

Can you help me think up the basis of a new plot, please?

Basically, I want these things to stay the same.
- The Huntre family [Holden, Arbor, Aspen, Winter, Broden and Ember]
- Hero being the descendent of a Restorer.
- A war having taken place between Restorers and Cruenti many years ago.
-Hero and Broden coming together at some point for a good reason

I really don't want to let go of my characters, so I would like to have a new plot to write them into.
Thanks so much =]


*All ideas © S.A.Laker-Gray & The GBW Guild

Answer 1

Alright, let me see here...

You could make it so that while Hero and Broden

are searching for this object ( the key to the earth? Never mind, lame idea), she finds out a more detailed history of the Cruenti, that puts them in a different light. Maybe the Restorers were preforming experiments on their own race and ended up with a blood thirsty being, that, after having many years to calm down and become civilized, is looking for revenge.

Sorry, I'm not a good story writer, and that plot was bad :(

Or you can just go with your original plot, and maybe something will present itself to you.



Sorry I can't be of better use.

Answer 2

Hey sounds fun! I like the idea of Hero being half human half Cruenti. It would explain why she would be more open to a friendship with Broden. However maybe the war is over, and the cruenti have gone into hiding? And perhaps some cruenti are doing things to suggest that they are still around or that they might be a threat to humans? You basically need a good catalyst to start the action, because it would be confusing for people to start reading her story when the war is right in the middle...



If you don't want Broden and Hero to fall in love, maybe the cruenti that Hero is related to could be related to the Huntres? ANd she could be like their cousin or soemthing? That would be an interesting twist.

Answer 3

Your predicament is a common one. The simple truth is, you have to be able to let go of your characters, no matter how much you want them to stay. You need to filter out the characters that either won't fit easily into the plot, or mess it up if they are in it. What you need to do is identify the source of this plot problem and cut it out. You see, a plot problem is like a tumor, let it stay and it grows maybe even killing your story, or if it doesn't do that, crippling it. But if you remove this "tumor" all is well and you can continue on.

Answer 4

It is definately not copy-righted if you are still on the story plot. No offense, but you don't really need to worry about people stealing your story ... it's a little weak. Work on the names - make them more realistic and take Dancie's advice into mind. You MUST always have an open-mind as a writer.

Answer 5

The plot is weak, but you need to re-write this yourself.

Answer 6

I like the first plot. :] Lol.

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