Cud u edit ths 4 me? lol, jk, Does someone want to look over a 4 page story I started? (Description included)?

Question

It's just the first chapter (it's three pages, plus like two sentences) . I've never tried to write in Third Person, but I don't think it's that bad. Just tell me how it sounds... please =)

It's about a girl (18) who's living with a guy (21) who abuses her.
It starts out with them "fighting" (arguing). That's pretty much the first part of the chapter... it (the chapter) ends sort of happy.

Anyway (I don't want to give anything away) if you do, leave your e mail address and I'll mail it to you.


Thanks!

Nicole.

Answer 1

Sure. You can send it to me - just be warned. I'm a REALLY harsh editor. Like, one comma placed wrong, and I flip. Of course, sometimes you need someone like that. I'm good, but I'm harsh. So be warned:D.

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Answer 2

One chapter being 3 pages long? Well, I think that you should stretch it out to 10 pages.



Anyway, it sound like a good idea.



E-Mail it to [e-mail]



Thanks.

Answer 3

Okay. [e-mail] Sounds really good.

Answer 4

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i'll give it a shot.