I need your opinion on my plot?

Question

I killed the main evil guy off quite early.
I'm considering re-writing that part so that he doesn't die. That way my main male character will have a foe. Don't you agree?
Well here's the part where my main male kills him:

Suddenly, the large metallic door opened. Gaspard froze. ‘Juden, halt!’. Gaspard clicked his heels, and stood motionless where he was. ‘What are you up to, Jew?’ I recognised the voice, but I couldn’t quite make out who it was. ‘I am on kitchen duty, sir!’
‘Then why are you out here, fumbling along the wall?’ The voice was laced with a sly perseverance that chilled me to my core. ‘You are trying to escape, aren’t you.’
‘No.’ Gaspard basically growled. ‘Ha! My first escapee.’ The voice exclaimed, rising in excitement. ‘And you got so far, too... One question though. How on Earth did you know about the secret entrance. Only we superiors know that, and you,’ he chuckled, ‘are certainly no superior.’ What was that voice? I just couldn’t put my finger on it. My heart was beating in my chest, sweat dripping off my forehead as my anxiety grew. ‘Oh you really have made my day... No, my WEEK!’ he clapped. ‘Now that I have stopped this potentially successful escape attempt, I am sure to be promoted to kommandant!’ Gaspard stood stationary, his hands straight by his side, his posture defensive. ‘You stupid, stupid Jew. So close to escape, and yet so far. I will make sure they keep you alive a long time in bunker 5.’ He slapped Gaspard across the face, and I heard him draw his whip. ‘But I’m going to have a little fun first.’
Suddenly I heard a commotion, a struggle, but I didn’t dare reveal my hiding place. ‘You stupid, German!’ There came a loud groan and more commotion. I rushed out, desperate not to seem a wimp. I didn’t want Jan to remember me as the girl that cowered while her fellow escapee suffered. To my shock, I saw Gaspard on top of the German, punching him over and over. I was consumed with an urge to help with the frenzied attack, and ran around to the German’s side. It was then that I realised who it was. Maczko, the kommandant’s son. His white hair was splattered with blood. He was desperately trying to fend off the raining punches, but was powerless compared to Gaspard’s strength. Gaspard removed something from his shoe, and it glinted in the light. A small knife. ‘You won’t ever be kommandant.’ He said, his voice heavy with hate, before effortlessly sliding the knife into Maczko’s abdomen. He screamed in pain, but Gaspard muffled the screams. After a few minutes, the struggles ceased.
‘Help me.’ Gaspard grunted between breaths, lifting up Maczko’s legs. I hoisted up his arms, and Gaspard backed into the crevice. He slumped Maczko up into a sitting position, his blood vibrantly red upon his pale skin. ‘Come one.’ Gaspard said, wiping sweat and blood from his forehead. ‘We haven’t much time.’ He wiped his hands on his pants, and began feeling along the wall once more. I inspected the scene of the crime. Blood was splattered on the floor and on the walls, barely visible in the dim lighting, and a small pool of blood rested where Maczko had taken his last breath.

Should I make it so he didn't really die? Or just re-write it completely so that this scene never happened.

Answer 1

Two things to consider. To make a book interesting, it needs conflict. It may not be in the form of an "evil" guy or theme, but simply exist between two lovers.



Second, if this "evil" guy is the source of conflict, then what if the "memory" of his existence continued the conflict? In other words, it is possible that you could work within the scope of the "unseen."



Just glancing (but not reading) through your prose, someone could take the place of your bad guy (in his defense) and continue the conflict.



There are a lot of possibilities to this beyond the two options you've suggested.

Answer 2

If you kill a main character in your plot early.

They are not a main character, just part of the story, for a main character to exist they must survive through the book, until you write the end.

Good idea Regards Keith

Answer 3

I liked it. You are a great writer. It took me awhile to get into it, but that may be coz its an extract and i have no idea what was going on before hand. I really liked the fighting bit, it was what really drew me in. I think the guy should die, but maybe you should have someone try to avenge his death?



I hope this helps.



Bella Xxx

Answer 4

you shouldnt let the main character die... i mean..its kinda sad..

like harry potter...

what if voldemort killed him???

then whats the whole point of the book??

but then again..there were some that had main characters dying.

it really is you decision b/c u wrote it..

go with whatever would make the readers excited.

but in my opinion ..if the main character died..i would be confused/devastated...confused as in y would the main character die??its sorta uncanny..

ex. whats harry potter and the...etc. without harry potter???

you know??



but thats my opinion.. u can go along with "the diary of Anne" i think thats the story title....idk i havent read it in sucha long time..but its during the holocaust and the jewish girl is in hiding wiht her family...and and the main character, Anne (or annie) dies.

it cried bullets...bc im never ready for the main character to die..



ur story/scene has soo much forlornness.

Answer 5

eliminate the scene is one option...or rewrite it...



what if the good guy believes that the bad guy is dead, but the bad guy is not actually dead, only unconscious ?



that would be very interesting...



or, what if the good guy hits the bad guy and runs away ?



that would give your plot a completely new direction...



etc...

Answer 6

die so the main character has something fight for you know, courage. will to live.

Answer 7

o my gosh! you should so right a book!!!!!!! thats amazing! very bloody, so maybe you should make him die l8r but bravo! call it... well idk!