Question:
what do you think of my story so far? thanks =]?
Me =]
2009-02-16 16:29:30 UTC
it's going to be about a boy who wants to be a poet and turns into a werewolve to be basic lol. the rest kinda tells itself.and i know alot of typos but i'm getting help with that =].lol...





“A springful of larks in a rolling
Cloud and the roadside bushes brimming with whistling
Blackbirds and the sun of October
Summery
On the hill's shoulder,
Here were fond climates and sweet singers suddenly
Come in the morning where I wandered and listened
To the rain wringing
Wind blow cold
In the wood faraway under me.”
-Dylan Thomas
I’d like to say that was my own work, but I’m only an aspiring poet.I spend most my time in this grove of trees staring at the sky with my light green eyes trying to understand what it all means.In desperation to find some meaning in my life, maybe a purpose or two.Poetry defines how life moves, how people are, and how each purpose stands in a way not everyone understands.My jet black hair blew in the wind as I sat in deep thought.My sister Gabriella, or as we call her Gabby, came running to where I was.”Mom said to come home.”,she said.”Okay.” , I replied.Mom never liked us out after dark when it came a full moon.She was exceedingly supersticious, even when it made no sense to anyone else.I walked back to my home waiting for the lecture I would get for being out when it was coming night.As I walked in the door my mother gave me the blankest stare almost like she still wasn’t sure if I was there.”Mom?”, I asked.”Yes Raymond?” .”Is everything alright?”.”Well I suppose it is.”Still something seemed odd about her expression when she heard me say her name.It was only mom that took care of us.Dad died when I was only 11 and Gabby was 7.I’m 17 now.As it grew darker I headed to my room along with my dog Snoop.Hes been my companion since I was 8.Hes a mix between a Siberian Husky and a Boxer.I sat on my bed with Snoop in deep thought once again.I thought about how life is so overrated and how people take it for granted at the same time.My thoughts start to wonder off into new chaotic thoughts .I couldn’t drift back to reality if I tried.Suddenly I heard a screeching sound at my window.As is someone were digging there nails into a chalkboard.I woke out of my daze with a fright.Snoop stared at the window like he was going to attack.My blinds were shut so I couldn’t comprehend what was on the other side.I walked over slowely to open.I saw a shadow of something..strange.It was hard to see because my blinds were still not completely opened.All of a sudden I heard an annoying sound.I opened my window to see what was going on.”Scared you didn’t I buddy!”, Chase said as he laughed.”Maybe a little Chase.What do you think you’re doing?” “Calm down dude I just came to see if you wanted to head out to the bowling alley with the rest of us for some lazor bowling”.”No thanks”, I replied.”Come on man you can’t stay home forever”, he said.”Who says I can’t?”, I replied.He looked at me rolling his eyes and said, “Whats with you not wanting to hang with dudes your own age? And did I mention a few of the opposite sex? Come on staying here isn’t going to do you any good.” ” It’s not that I don’t want to it’s just bad timing is all” .“So is every night a bad one? Or is this one special because of the full moon?”, he said sarcastically.”Chase,just go!” I replied in anger.” “Ok, Ok dude don’t get you pannies in a bunch.” He walked off as I went and sat back down.It wasn’t that I believed in my mothers crazy supersticions I just needed some time alone.But Chase was right.I never leave my home and he was my only friend.I’ve known him my whole life.He was my neighbor.I always thought he was obnoxious, but one day in elementary it all changed.Ever since we became pretty descent friends.Time to put my racing thoughts to bed I thought as I layed my head down for rest.The next morning was the usual routine.I got up, grabbed an orange, from the bowl of fruit mom usually leaves on the dining room table, and headed off to school in my old rusted SUV.What a gas guzziler, but it was another excuse to why I don’t get out much.At school there is your basic stereotypes, jocks, preps, emos, goths, populars, geeks, and so on.And then there was me.I fit in nowhere and I never have. That’s just me for you.
Three answers:
2009-02-16 16:49:00 UTC
i think it's very good, too!

and, just like the previous answerer said, keep working on the spelling and break it into paragraphs, so others can read it easier.
dermio
2016-10-18 08:46:15 UTC
you have some spelling errors, it extremely is somewhat useful to revise those and pass returned into ingredient slightly extra. you like extra punctuation like " " 's whilst somebody is speaking. different then that the story line is great i assume. candy and to the ingredient. Like. :)
twilight maniac
2009-02-16 16:38:13 UTC
i think its really good! just break it up into paragraphs and work on the spelling!



can u help me with my story plz?

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