Good Idea for a Story?

Question

Ok, so it's a steampunk kinda story, that starts off in 1920's London. Britain are just recovering from the Great War, and all seems well blah blah. Then this mysterious fog appears, nobody knows where from but the general consensus is that it came from the sewers/underground. Anyway, this fog has strong effects on all mammals, it differs from animal to animal, but generally it causes them to mutate and grow in size, either drastically or minorly, in size and become incredibly feral. It kills most of the humans, but those who those who don't die mutate into these monsters. Exept for a small minority who are immune to it. They evacuate into what can only really be described as an enormous space station, only it's not in space, it hovers over the city just above the fog. This becomes known as Upper London, or as most call it; The Overcity (wheras the old London becomes The Undercity.
Then the story cuts forward however many years, let's say fifty, and we meet our lead character, Locke who was born on the Overcity. Now try to imagine the Overcity having several levels, the lower level being the poor, slum district, and the top level being the rich district. Locke was raised in the lower levels, so he's fairly poor. Anyway, cutting a long story short, his father is found out to be plotting to overthrow the people who are in charge of The Overcity, and he is sentenced to banishment; being sent down to the undercity with nothing but a gas mask, a gun and a small bag of supplies, basically being left for dead. So he is sent down and a few days later Locke discovers somehow that his father was actually framed. So he reveals this to the rulers who pardon his father but refuse to go looking for him claiming that he will be dead by now but he'll have an honorable death blah blah. But Locke has none of this and vows to go down into The Undercity, find his lost father and bring him back. And so the rest of the story is about this.

So what do you think, i'm sorry my description is a bit long winder, but i was just wondering what you guise thought :') constructive criticism is more than welcome :3

Answer 1

I don't say this very often, but that sounds REALLY COOL and I'd read that in a heartbeat.

Answer 2

It's a very interesting idea. I like it very much and would be very willing to read it when you get around to writing it. Need a beta? I'll offer! Especially if this main character has a love interest, and romance is my true passion. Oh... and can we get a different name for the main character? It just reminds me too much of Locke and Key and those stories. Something we haven't seen as far as names in science-fictiong/urban fantasy stories.

If I knew more of the story itself, I'd be happy to help with ideas for it, too! I can just picture this 'Locke' character having a girl, whom he can't stand, go down to help him bring his father back. And along the way they form a friendship, then fall in love. *sighs* Oh... and wouldn't it be sooooo twisted if the father really was dead, even though some signs pointed to him being alive? Sad, ironic, and twisted.

Anyways... great idea!

Answer 3

you should change the fog to a experimental cure for cancer turned horrible germ cuz fog just seems over used