What Do you think about my novel??? how should i end it???? if for school im in grade 12???? what do you think?

Question

ok i need help on how to end it but tell me if you think this is good so fair

ok so what happens is there's this couple that finds this young boy walking down the side of the road in the middle of the night. When they try to talk to the boy he doesn't remember much of anything (his mother/father where he lives ex). They take him in, no one clames him, so they adopt him. The boy shows little emotion through out the book, but he is a good kid VERY SMART in school, yet he doesn't remember much about his past b4 being adopted still. Then his mother and father come to the house clame the kid and drive away about 6 mounts later. The foster mother finds out where they took the child and it was to a facility, they fine out he is a clone of a child the mother and father had a few years ago how died. But this clone was never trained to love, so the people who made him are surprised. He wasn't suppose to feel emotion because if he did it would mess with all kinds of religious stuff, and clones are not sapost to have a soul according to the doctors who made him. He was sapost to be like a super child very smart, but yet almost robotic like, so the doctors decide to destroy him because it was not a sapost to happen this way.

And that's about all i got so fair but im not sure to make it a happy ending or a sad one. But tell me was you think sorry if my spelling is a little of i was in a rush. Tell what you think about the book thought IYHO. Im not gonna be scared for life you don't like it. But you think all get an A on it. I got an A on the book i had to make last year

there a chapter in the story that makes everything come together in the end but if i told you it, it wouldn't make sense you would have to read the book but basically the real mother and father wanted there child to love THEM not someone else. Tell me what you think if its good and how should i end it??? any idea's because im kind of stuck but im almost done

Answer 1

It sounds like a short story rather than a novel. Novels are at least 40,000 words and have to be edited through many drafts before it's completely polished. I've never heard of a high school having as an assignment that students write a book for the school term(s), because they usually can't be written (well) within a years time.



Anyway, one thing that stood out and does not seem realistic is that if the foster parents eventually adopt the child then he's their child, so how can the real parents come back and take him within a 6 month period? Then, you have all the time they were away from the child and claim him to the point that he was adopted. It's not so easy for biological parents to come and take away a child who has been adopted. I've never heard of such a court case. Parental rights are not easily taken away, but once they are it is permanent.



You also mention that the boy was adopted, and then later after the parents come you refer to the adoptive parents as foster parents. If they adopted the boy they're no longer his "foster" parents. Also, if they've had the boy for a long time and they didn't adopt him and the bio parents came along then hopefully they'd put a court fight, and that would last more than 6 months.



I highly suggest you do some research on this before you write this aspect of the story, so you can have a bit of understanding going in. You want realism in your stories or people will begin to discount it and think you're lazy for not doing the needed research.

Answer 2

I'm appalled that you can be a senior in high school, and type so badly. I sincerely hope you don't write your stories like this.



A couple of pointers:



-One question mark is quite enough

-The word is far, not fair

-Scarred for life, not scared

-Always capitalize I

-Use periods, and commas

-Capitalize the first letter in every sentence

-It's etc., not ex

-Off, not of

-Supposed to, not sapost to

-I'm, not Im

-Claim, not clame



That's just a few things I have to point out, because I don't have all day to fix your many, many errors.

Answer 3

It would be a cool twist if the 'clone' fell in love with someone...it would be, like, forbidden, if he weren't supposed to feel emotion. The story has a nice plot, I'll be interested to see what you do with it. Good luck!