Do you think this sounds promising for a story plot?

Question

Okay, I've had writers block for a long time now, and all week I've been working on things for a new story. The characters I'm using are already well developed as they're OCs who I've used in the past.

The story is about two partners in crime, a male and a female, who work for an underground criminal organization. A little background info, they've been working together for ten years, have been successful, and there's a lot of sexual tension between them. Relationships are forbidden at this organization they work for, so they strictly can't act on their feelings, so they haven't ever told each other.

The hardest part was coming up with an opening, but I was inspired. It starts with them speeding away from the police after committing a crime. They're arguing as well as hightailing it, and this ends up in them crashing the car and getting caught, leaving the female with minor injuries. They're jailed, after MFC gets treated at hospital, and then their boss bails them out. When they get back to base, other members of the organization are talking about them and speculating over what happened. The boss makes them do some undignified jobs for him, cleaning the dirtiest areas of the base.

They're be conflict with other characters and various incidents in between, then at some point MMC and MFC will sleep together. MFC brushes it off as a meaningless fling the following morning. MMC is hurt by this and conflict arises between the two, making them act coldly towards each other. Until...MFC finds out she's pregnant. With twins. She eventually has to tell MMC, and this ultimately brings them closer together. They have the option to get rid of the baby or keep it, and risk eventually being found out and getting fired or worse, not to mention hiding it from their peers.

That was a brief outline of the things I plan to have happen, but I'd like to know if it sounds promising? Just be honest, I'd rather know beforehand rather than going ahead and writing an idea that's uninteresting or plain silly. If there's anything wrong with certain ideas, or anything I could change to make them better, or ANY other critique or help, it's GREATLY appreciated.

Thanks in advance!

Answer 1

It is interesting. I have a few suggestions take them with a grain of salt it is just a little food for thought.



1) I don’t like the idea of them cleaning out the hide out, it seems a little juvenile. I think a better plot would be that maybe because of them getting arrested they think someone in the gang is a snitch. The mob boss wants to keep a close eye on them so he keeping them under thumb and will not let them do any real high profile jobs. He keeps them doing research, technical planning equipment checks that sort of thing. It would give you more to build upon

2) Lose the twins. It’s been done, it is over used and you would not find out about there even being twins until about 8 weeks in and only after an ultra sound. Ultra sounds are very emotional times it usually when for most woman the idea of having a baby becomes real. It’s the first time you hear the heart beat. If you are thinking about having her have an abortion keep this in mind. There is a reason many Pro-lifers would like it as a mandatory thing, It would make for an interesting plot twist.

Answer 2

It really does sound like a great plot. Full of action, adventure and romance. Great! Although

Maybe instead of them cleaning (That seems like a minor punishment) they have to go out and kill an old enemy of the boss' or something like that. They get into a bit of danger ect. It'll make the story more interesting than cleaning up some ****. Then maybe a few other members of the organisation begin to suspect them of liking each other OR they get suspicious because someone in the group has been ratting them out and they think it's them but it turns out it isn't?

I don't know. Just a couple of ideas there.

Best of luck, it really does sound like a brilliant story. Well worth the read.

:D

Answer 3

This reminds me a lot of the Spanish novela Camaleones. The two characters were kind of like spies and working for a criminal who was trying to get revenge. They fell in love although it was forbidden, they slept together, and the girl got pregnant and had to eventually tell the guy. They also had friends but had to keep it from them.



If you want to write it then do so. I kind of feel like I've heard a lot of spy/partner in crime stories already, but if you believe yours will be different and be able to stand apart from all the others then do it.

Answer 4

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Answer 5

Sounds great