What do you think of my plot for a romance novel?

Asian Persuasion

2011-11-25 17:44:38 UTC

Set in a make-believe town in Minnesota, present day, the story is told from the first person view of Andi Evans, a Sophomore who hides a dark secret that behind closed doors, her mother relentlessly abuses her, her excuse being that she is a 'god fearing woman' and that Andi 'is not her child.' Obviously, I’m looking forward to writing some very psychologically engrossing scenes, unlike most sappy stories, Andi is not a character you feel sympathy towards, instead, her will power and quirky attitude towards life make you draw strength from her. I include heaps of natural, woodland scenery. Andi escapes to these 'sanctuaries' that keep her 'safe' i.e. an abandoned cubby house imbedded in the heart of the forest, an isolated lake with an island in the middle, a cliff top overlooking her quaint little town etc.
Her best friend Eva, a fierce, protective, half native American tomboy is the only one who knows about Andi’s troubling life, she plays the bigger sister roll, the person that picks up the broken pieces of a shattered person and glues them back together again.
Andi is an extreme party girl with terrible insecurities, the opening chapter having her coming home from a party to be confronted by her mother. She drinks to forget, and drinks to gain confidence, and loves the thrill of a man in the heat of the moment. Names are thrown around about her, but everyone wants to know more about the mysterious girl whom misses weeks of school, is quiet, yet is a known party girl.
Her father was tragically murdered in his bed by being stabbed, her elder brother Lucas whom has moved out of home now, and herself discovered the body. She is troubled by the images she saw. I reveal later who did it and why, because I love a good crime.
Of course, i include a love triangle, because that’s always juicy.
There is a boy, Levi, the classic, dark, handsome, charmer whom she had known since pre-school, he rode past her house the night her father was murdered and watched behind police tape. They had been good friends, but last year they slept together at the annual summer lake party. He is a known 'player' and has always had a soft spot for Andi. Now they have intriguing, flirtatious interactions. He suspects correctly about her troubled life, he's constantly helping her out and Andi is in debt to him for many things. He's the son of the town Mechanic.
There is a new boy, Christian, the casually dressed, blonde-haired family boy who moves from the twin cities. He moves into a house four doors down from Andi and she is somewhat fascinated by this handsome, new boy. Immediately there are holes in his perfect-boy persona, he has regular absences from class, mysterious behaviour, and always appears to look tired and worn; his twin sister whom he is very protective over appears the same. One day she sees him when she skips class and follows him. He goes to the hospital, and she finds that he has a younger brother who is terminally ill. After the initial shock and anger, they form this abstract relationship, the story reveals that he is the sole thing that keeps his crumbling family together.

I’ve written a nice plan where all the things mentioned above tie in nicely into a flowing, non-confusing plot. I’m sorry it was long, but believe me when I say I tried to keep it short. this is my second time posting this question if you think you saw this before. Honest opinions please, and thank you so much for reading.