is this a good plot for a novel? help pls?

Question

ok so i am planning to write a novel and so far i only have the plot(detailed)
i already posted this but i edited the story and gave it a title so i hope this one is better :D

Title:Emotions

Plot:our story begins with a beautiful young girl named elaine winslet a very adventurous girl , kindhearted responsible and independent and also came from a very wealthy family who lived in hampshire.
she also loved music arts and literature she played the piano and wrote novels. she had one sister named elizabeth winslet who is her exact opposite .. beautiful in the outside but ugly on the inside
she always envied elaine for she always thought that their father always favored elaine.

in elaine's childhood(age:12 or 13) she met a young boy who changed her life.
a boy by the name of james hamilton son of the duke and was very friendly,
they met in a ball in hampshire. they became friends and when they grew up(age of 17 - 19) they fell in love with each other.
james's brother william hamilton(serious,anti social,favorite of their father) also fell in love with elaine
but elaine never knew.

one day william finally told elaine his true feelings but elaine rejected him for elaine loved james..
william got mad and furious william told elaine's parents that he wants to marry elaine, he was confident that elaine's parents would choose him rather than james for he is the heir of his father.

elaine's mother liked william and gave him her blessing but elaine's father disagree'd for he wanted for her daughter to choose freely. obviously elaine would choose james.
so when william failed he moved on to his next plan.. his plan was to ask his father a favor to do something for him and james to come back to london. so when his father came up with an alibi his father then sent a letter to hampshire.(as expected) james and william came back but james promised elaine that he would be back soon..

when james and william was in london their father decided that james needs a wife for his father disapprove to james and elaine's love. so his father seeked for an eligible girl and soon found one,
a girl by the name of margaret howell(very wealthy)but elaine who is back in hampshire was pregnant with james's son(james didn't knew at the time)so when margaret and james was engaged and soon to be married james came back to hampshire and asked elaine to run away with him so they both ran away they ended up somewhere in berkshire, elaine was about to tell james that she is pregnant.

But elaine found out that james was to be exiled by his father if he wouldn't marry margaret.
so elaine did the right thing(she thought was)to come back home. james had no other options but to come back home to london and marry margaret.

when elaine came back to hampshire she told her parents that she was pregnant with james's son. and that james is engaged and soon to be married. elizabeth(the evil envious sister) sent a letter to william about elaine being pregnant, william told his father and then the duke demanded for the child(as soon it's born). the winslets could do nothing but agree.
so 9 months later elaine's child was born(named after his father. frederick james hamilton II) after a few weeks elaine gave her child to the duke (personally).

Elaine was so sad and was depressed for months until a year or two passed by.
elaine and james's wounded heart still didn't healed

james and william came back to hampshire for a certain event for them to attend along the way they also visited elaine
(james also brought their child) they talked and when james couldn't take looking(with full of regrets) at elaine anymore he left. william stayed (he and elaine had a private conversation) and apologized for everything he has caused. and then told elaine that she doesn't have to be alone and then proposed. elaine rejected and said that she will wait for james even if it takes forever.

soon enough ajmes and william left hampshire and came back to london.


as time passed things had changed..
James who never had a happy marriage became a politician

William became replaced his father and became the new duke

Elaine (was never married) became a great and popular author

Elizabeth married to a officer and had a peaceful life..

William often helps elaine to see her son ..

The end?

thats my plan for the story though pls critique and tell me if its good or if its rubbish.
really need help :D anyway im only 12 so if it's rubbish im sorry :) and it's the first
novel im planning to write.. thanks!!!!!!!!! you guys rock!

Answer 1

If your story would be made into a movie and it needed to be summarized on the cable TV guide in a single, short sentence, and they asked to provide it, what would you say?



[An 18th century girl pursues a true love from childhood, only to have circumstances constantly pull them apart.] (Or something like that.)



Whatever you come up with IS your story's main plot. All the rest is just how it happens. And when you describe the rest, it must all point back to that main plot.



That's the most important thing you can do to really figure out what your story is about. Until you can provide that single sentence with confidence, you really don't have a story, just a bunch of connected (or even disconnected) events.



I wouldn't say it's rubbish, and it sounds like you've given it a lot of thought, but come up with what you think that sentence is, and it will help to define whether your detailed plot actually fulfills that goal of the story.

Answer 2

Firstly.. what century is it set in - it's unlikely to be feasible to get away withit being modern day as that sort of marriage isn't very common place nowadays.



The story itself is fine, a touch romantic and emotional for my liking but it would appeal to quite a few I'd guess. My main concern is the ending. It's too much like real life which people don't tend to like. Either give them a happy ending or make it a really miserable one - James changes his mind but then dies for some reason on the way to see her and tell her, or she cna't cope with it and ends up in an asylum.



Other than that it looks fine to me - the main things is... get writing and enjoy it. Good luck to you.

Answer 3

I'm a boy who doesn't like more than a little romance but this book even sounded intresting to me! It sounds very good, but I think it'd be best if set in 1800's London or England and it should have a happy ending

Answer 4

very nice