I need some feedback on my story idea?

Question

I've decided to write a story about a pro quarterback and med school student. Here's some info on the story..

Plot- The main girl (Carleigh) just caught her boyfriend cheating on her with the president of her sorority. She reluctantly breaks up with him, knowing that its the right thing to do. Many other bad things happen that day, and whenever she's upset, she goes to this sports bar downtown to just relax. While she's there, the power goes out and she left her keys in the car, so she's stuck inside the pitch black room. She starts crying and this stranger hears her and lets her vent to him. Little does she know, that its the NFL QB (Blake) who's in town visiting his alma mater. The power comes back on and she instantly recognizes him, and after she freaks out, they start talking and he asks her to dinner. So that's how they meet. They have an instant connection, so their relationship blossoms for the two weeks Blake's in town. Then he must go back to Oakland, and they send letters back and forth and do video chat, yadda yadda yadda.. Their relationship is thrust into the spotlight, and Carleigh is starting to get followed by a few journalists, looking for details of their romance. After a several months, Carleigh moves to Oakland for medical school, and.. i haven't gotten any farther. :)

Main characters-Carleigh is on the shyer side, but has a bubbly and friendly personality once you get to know her. She sometimes feels undeserving of Blake, which comes from her lack of confidence. She is very stubborn and has a slight temper. She is funny and kind. Blake is humble, caring, and genorous and would do anything for Carleigh. He sometimes can be a bit overprotective.

Title- Right now, its "First and Smit-Ten" but i don't like that very much.. Any ideas?

Thank you SOOO much if you read this and take the time to give me some feedback.. You don't know how much I appreciate it!
xox

Answer 1

i think your main character decides that moving to Oakland was not the best thing....so one night she packs up her stuff and tells him she is going to leave. THen she leaves. On her way back, she gets into a car accident where she is paralyzed from the waste down.. She must decide if she wants to stay with her boyfriend (QB) or if she wants to go back where she really feels comfertable.



Also, I think it should be called........Little Does She Know

Answer 2

So i think that its pretty typical that she has a bad day and finds the boy of her dreams in the dame day. Now i think something should come shocking but shocking enough for it to be not real in the real world you know what i mean? Haha, i like a little shock and twist in stories.

Answer 3

It sounds interesting. I would read it.

Answer 4

Awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm trying to write a book myself and the farthest i have gotten is one page. xD. Yours is way awesome! I LOVE BOOKS! (im a bibliophile)

Answer 5

It's OKAY. And please don't over expose your story in YA. There are bad people out there you know.