Question:
If I'm Writing A Fantasy, Do You Want A Lot Of Description?
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2011-07-10 23:48:49 UTC
I myself, hate too much description in a fantasy. I'd like the reader to picture what they will, and I'll only focus on the important things. But I was given a critique that says "My problem isn't what you show me. It's what you don't show me," and he pretty much goes on to say to add on description.

Do you think it's important? Or should most of it be left to the reader's imagination?
Twelve answers:
Anonymous
2011-07-11 01:24:01 UTC
Well, I think you should include a lot of description if the setting (or something in the setting), is unfamiliar to the reader's world/reality. My description is lax when I describe a room within a house, for instance, and only point out a couple things .. b/c everyone can picture the house. But in my fantasy world, I have an ecosystem so completely different to ours that I weave in a lot of description between the action.



I have plants that reproduce like animals, and those that look nothing like ours. So it would be insufficient to simply describe it as a tree or an elm tree/beech tree/oak tree/etc. So again, description is necessary and much more appreciated if the world is drastically different to the world we know. It also allows you to capture the atmosphere more and this is a driving force behind why people read fantasy novels...they want that fantastical, mysterious, wonderous feeling while they're immersed in your universe. Or so, I do.



But you're the author. You have to make the decision. If you don't provide much description then you risk losing the atmosphere you envisioned and the readers may see something that isn't ordinary as ordinary and bland. But if it's something that is easily imaginable, then leaving it to the reader's imagination is a good idea..or so I think, personally.
Faded Dreams
2011-07-11 00:14:32 UTC
I personally don't like too much description either. Some is definitely necessary and nice to have, and you don't want to leave everything to the reader's imagination. It's all a balancing act. It's just as easy to go overboard and have way too much description. Either way, I prefer to see description woven into the story, not just dumped in there for no apparent reason so that it interrupts the story or gets boring. One thing you might want to ask yourself is, have you gotten this kind of feedback before? Or just ask people what they think of your description. It may be that you do actually need to describe things more, or it may be that this critiquer simply prefers more description than most.
Roni Avanesian
2011-07-10 23:54:28 UTC
Well, I've both written and read some fantasy. (What I wrote was crap, but what I read''' man it was good!) I've read stuff like Eragon, Harry Potter, Chronciles of Blood and Stone, Wheel of Time, all those, and my advice to you is to include descriptions. If you just put the important things of the book, your not making it a real-life kind of thing. You need detail. I've alwese felt this way when I wrote and checked what I wrote and stuff never really was as good. I'll admit that it was boring, but still. Anyway, go with the description plan.
Cynthia
2016-03-02 07:35:56 UTC
Probably the best fantasy series I read for adults would be George RR Martin's A Song and Ice and Fire series (A Game of Thrones, Feast for Crows, Storm of Swords, etc sorry i cant remember the order right now). They are AWESOME. the plot lines and characters are very complex and deep and the entire series is still going. I must warn you before you read though that there are a lot of sex scenes and the series is pretty graphic.There will also be times when you get really angry reading the books because not everything turns out the way you want. But I promise that you will love the books. I think theyve been voted as the best fantasy series consistently by lots of organizations. There is also a TV adaption starring Sean Bean (Boromir) on HBO that just finished the first season on Sunday.
?
2011-07-11 11:37:39 UTC
What annoys me more is when the description turns into purple prose

She stood, gazing out towards the edge of the horizon; she sucked in the ocean air. The beach was empty. It was quiet, but she could hear the voices of nature. The sea rolled steadily onto the beach, just reaching her toes. She felt the caress of the wind blow swiftly through her hair. Opening her arms, with eyes tightly shut; she invited the breeze to fill her with an endless tranquility. Every colour imaginable simultaneously wrapped around each other, framing the cerulean water just as it connected with the submerging sun, becoming one entity. She was in perfect serenity. *gags*



I personally like description *only* if done well. If the description bores me then it isn't a good sign. I always try to see the best in books; I even tried to point out the good in twilight to myself - it was virtually impossible.



Some authors describe a little market town or a bedroom better than others describing a ferocious battle.



I like description - it's one of my favourite parts to write - whether it's a character feeling an emotion, or describing the path they happen to be walking on at the time. I don't (well hope I don't) make the scene to long, but I like to make sure I, and the reader can visualise the scene without the unnecessary words.



So yes, give us description . . . but don't desert your style - if you want the reader to imagine, make sure you let the reader imagine.
Seal
2011-07-10 23:57:40 UTC
I like description, myself :3 As long as it's relevant. Doesn't have to be a lot, but just enough to paint a scene - although it seems most YA books now are lighter on the description. They usually describe a place along the lines of "Placename was a small town in the middle of rolling green hills. Character watched the dusty road in front of them as the cart rambled along to Whereverthey'regoing."

All right, bad description. I'm not really so good at vivid images of places myself either, but I do like descriptions. Not tiny details of everything, but not very general descriptions either.



Those are just my preferences, but it seems like what I like in amount of description isn't typical for teen fantasy. So I guess you should be fine, as long as you put enough so the reader has something to fill in the details with.



EDIT: And then again, too much description isn't good either :P Like I said I'm not quite so good at doing it myself - some authors seem to put in small details of random things, and the whole story comes alive. I felt books like The Demon King and Graceling were fairly description-light. I didn't like The Demon King at all - didn't really get through it, but I think it was the characters annoying me more than the setting. Graceling I thought was all right description-wise, good enough for me and pretty good for most, but I would've liked a little more than that. If you like, you can go check out some of the more popular books of your genre and audience, and see how much description they generally put and where.



Now that I mention that, I think I need to do that. XD
anonymous
2011-07-11 06:14:28 UTC
I think you should make the reader imagine what you imagine (i.e: 'she saw a very beautiful house. Its wall was crystal clear' can be ' the house that stood before her was incredibly beautiful. Its crystal clear wall shatter the sunray, and made it glowing like rainbow' or whatever)

imagination is absolute in fantasy, and since you're writting about something that actually didn't exist, you must describe it really well (if you say just 'manhattan', everyone can imagine it. If you say just 'fairy world' and you didn't explain a single bit of it, people will go 'what?')



hope this help!
?
2011-07-11 00:02:38 UTC
Think about it like a building that you are constructing: You have pillars that hold up the structure, that represent the important pieces of the plot that propel the story forward. Then there are pillars that are simply for decoration, which represent the description in your story.

If you're making a building, you want it to be pleasing to the eye as well as functional. The thing, however, is balance. Some pillars for support, some for the eye appeal. A decorative piece here and there can help so much, but be careful not to go overboard.

Hope this helped!
Steven J Pemberton
2011-07-11 02:23:00 UTC
I write fantasy (see my profile), and I tend to be light on description, at least by the standards of the genre. My attitude is "as little as the reader needs to not get a false impression of the scene". I never do big chunks of description. I always try to anchor it to what the point-of-view character can perceive at the moment. If I have more than about three sentences of description, I'll break it up with the character doing something or saying something or thinking something.



People read fantasy for the sense of being in another world, so details can be important, but I hate it when writers bring the story to a juddering halt to try to impress you with a page-long description of a castle or a marketplace. I picture the characters standing there, tapping their feet, waiting for him to finish. I've seen enough castles and marketplaces to picture what this one probably looks like. If you brought the characters here, it's because something's going to happen here that's important in the story. So get on with the story already!



This is the first passage with a lot of description in Death & Magic, from chapter 2. (There's little description in chapter 1, because it's set in a place where the main character has lived half her life, so she doesn't notice the scenery any more. You can get away with more description of a place the character has never seen before.)



Adramal took her leave of the barge crew and stepped onto one of the wharves at Kyer Altamar’s western docks. Beside the wharves stood a row of tall wooden buildings - warehouses, a man on the barge had called them. Their height rivalled the tallest trees that grew near her home. She shouldered her pack and walked along an alleyway that led past the nearest warehouse and into the city proper. Nobody on the barge had known exactly where the school was, but they’d thought it would be easy to find someone who did.



The alley opened onto a broad, cobbled street, crowded with horse-drawn wagons. The horses stood patiently as burly men transferred goods between the wagons and the warehouses. Adramal gasped - she’d never seen so many of the animals in one place. The wind shifted, slapping her in the face with their smell. Crowded into such a small space, they bordered on overpowering. She placed a hand over her mouth and nose as she hurried past them.



At the end of the street stood a large wooden building with a little barrel hanging over the door. This, Adramal recalled, meant the building was a tavern - a good place to obtain information, the barge crew had told her.



The tavern’s interior was a long narrow room, with a row of booths running along either side. Quiet conversation reached her from further in. Smoke from candles lingered among the rafters, and a strong smell of beer hung in the air. Adramal hesitated. The crew hadn’t said anything about beer. Like any intoxicant, it interfered with a wizard’s ability to perform magic, and so the teachers at Thuren had warned her to avoid the stuff whenever possible.



If you pick out all the descriptive details there, I'm telling you quite a lot, but (if I've done my job well) you don't notice that I'm telling you a lot, because other things are going on at the same time.
?
2011-07-11 05:44:42 UTC
No, i love books, but honestely when there's too much description i just find myself bored reading it, i end up reading it without actually "reading" it, so it takes me a few times to re-read it, try to describe it in a simple and interesting way that doesn't get the reader too bored
caring carer
2011-07-11 04:50:25 UTC
I hate detailed descriptions that go on for pages and loose you that lots of fantasy writers do, I just want enough to give me a picture and then let my own imagination do the rest. You won't please everyone all the time.
anonymous
2011-07-10 23:52:49 UTC
You are the eyes of the reader you need to show then in the story and it sounds like you are writing in black and white - adding detail makes the story come alive in color


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