First thing the remember:
You are writing for ME not for YOU
That means you may have to simplify things because I'm a dullard and you're not.
Keep to a topic.
Don't repeat yourself in other paragraphs.
Follow the format
WHO
WHAT
WHERE
WHEN
WHY
The most IMPORTANT THING goes first, the LEAST IMPORTANT THING goes last.
Style is also important.
I think it was Paddy Chayefsky that said he removes all the adjectives on first re-write.
The quick brown fox jumped over the lazy dogs.
The fox jumped over the dogs.
Now, you have to decide if all that flowery stuff is REALLY required for the reader to understand you or if cutting to the chase works best.
Being clever can be nice.
One reviewer of "Dukes Of Hazard" the Movie called it:
"Everything you expected and worse!"
At that point they don't have to go on.
Read good writers.
Let's take a case in point. Howard Hawks considered "To Have and Have Not" Hemminway's WORST book.
He got Faulkner to write the first draft.
Faulkner gave us lines like: "It's even better when you help!" (Bogart to Bacall over their second kiss)
"YOu do know how to whistle, don't you! You just put your lips together and blow!"
Bacall to Bogart
Hemmingway wrote that sober and Faulkner probalby wrote it drunk.
I occasionally write a gem. I did a piece on film editing and I said "that is where your budget goes from here to Mars and back!"
That's a metaphor.
It's rare I come out with a gem like that!
It does paint a picture, doesn't it. You have a budget, Mars is 32 to 64 million miles away, that is a long distance.
A picture is worth 1,000 words. I could have elaborated on budgets, but instead I gave people a metaphor they could grasp.
Be concise.
Say it in as few words as you can.
Einstein said, you have to Make Granny understand it!
Of course if you read HIS explaination of Relativity, NO ONE's GRANNY could grasp that!
But his point is well taken
YOU WRITE FOR ME NOT FOR YOU
Marilyn Lewis-Mayer taught me that and as a result I got published 5 times in a row.
Re-write.
Make it squeeky clean.
Don't giive the editor anywhere to go with your work. Make every word COUNT!
Otherwise they will chop your work to shreds!
YOU need to chop your own work to shreds!
If you cut all the FAT away and all the BONE away, all they are left with is the meat.
Sometimes you have to tell the dullards at the magazine.
I wrote a piece on BEER making and the group that made beer was called the MALTOSE FALCONS
Some dullard copy editor changed it to MALTESE FACONS
MALTOSE refers to the ingredient MALT which is in BEER
So in your COVER letter you have to clarify that.
Tell the IDIOTS at the MAGAZINE, you know the difference between MATLESE (which, by the way, is a Bogart film and not real) and MALTOSE
Otherwise THEY will make YOU look like an IDIOT in print!
Writing for publication is just like writing for a graduate thesis or dissertation, you have to CITE.
Except you CITE in your cover letter.
MALTOSE, that's the name of the group, it's a play on the word MALT and TOSE, don't change it!
It will sink into the copy editors brain.
The copy editor tries to out guess you, that's how they keep their job!
They are RIGHT and you are WRONG
If you are RIGHT in WRITE, then YOU MUST TELL THEM UP FRONT, it's a name, a play on words, don't change it or GOD WILL GET YOU!
They'll snicker and leave it alone.
For me, doing an internet based magazine that comes out every two months improved my writing a lot!
I still make MISTRAKES, but not as many as I did in the year 2000!
Yahoo answers is a good test. Write here. MAKE IT PERFECT. It doesn't matter if you have to re-write 25 times and spend 2 hours doing it.
I screw off, because I'm not paid and I'm already in PRINT and in the Reader's
Guide to Periodical Literature and in Who's Who in Entertainment.
I don't have to prove my self to be PERFECT here, just in the ball park!
They are lucky to have me around researching and writing for "points" and "levels!"