What do you think of my poem? What do you imagine when you read it?

Question

This is supposed to be about two innocent young girls whose friendship was ripped apart by conflict between their parents. Then they began to write and were slowly healed.

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The River Between

It was a beautiful thing at first,
to see the river running,
Between the two,
Who were holding hands.
They stepped back in surprise,
At the cool water,
Running over their feet.
They let go their hands,
To explore the river curiously,
Not knowing,
That they will not be able,
To grab hold again.
The current grew stronger,
One began to panic,
Splashing frantically.
While the other,
Slowly stepped back,
Shocked and unsure.
They searched for each other’s hands
But in the gathering darkness ,
All they found were the smooth cold stones,
In the riverbed.
Finally the two stepped back onto dry land,
And stared at each other in dismay.
For a long while they stared,
Wounded and grieving,
Until one found a large flat leaf,
And a stick of mud.
wrote words of Love,
And let the wind carry them to the other side.
The other followed suit,
And back and forth they wrote;
slowly healing.
The river is still roaring,
And is too strong to cross.
But someday,
The waters will subside.
And the two can join hands once more,
Turn to the east,
And see the dawn of a new day.
A new day,
in the greatest story of all.
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This story represents me, actually, and MY best friend.

Answer 1

brilliant. it flows really well and the imagery is actually really good while i'm reading it as well. It reminds me of two people who were really oblivious at first that they were growing apart, maybe they were to busy for one another or didn't discuss something. when the gap between them grew so large that they noticed, they realized that they had to be patient for their bond to get back to the way it was. reminded me of a couple but it works for best friends too that's what's cool. sorry for rambling, but good job! God bless.

Answer 2

You have lead by way of this instance considering the fact that I were right here besides. I admire it, seeing that I recognize while notion hits, I can submit and you'll no longer anticipate whatever. I attempt to do the equal as you presently, however I as a rule surprise wherein the notion comes from. I shouldn't have plenty of revel in studying/writing poetry, so I used to feel humans needed to be within the second to drag off a plausible write. Perceptions have transformed, to the factor that if anyone used to be making an attempt to arrive out, I might on no account recognize. This saddens me somewhat, seeing that while I didn't discover I used to be attaining out, you and others have been there for me. I will on no account disregard that, incidentally. Without ever figuring out you, you could have helped greater than you'll ever recognize. Thank you so very a lot! Oops, sorry, seeking to preclude the 'drama' factor. My dangerous. These have been well phrases to submit!

Answer 3

I think it is really good





I see two friends who are the best of friends and they get distracted at something then they realize they have been separated but the only way they can come together again is to wait and be kind to each other