anonymous
2008-12-06 11:57:49 UTC
I am writing a story and wanted to add a certain scenario to make it more interesting and surprising. I wanted at the end to be surprising and make it seems what the reader would expect but it was actually a dream of what could have been. But I was also thinking about using it in the beginning. Would that be okay or is that a bad idea b/c the readers might suspect it in the end or wondered where did that come from.
So to make more sense I took out a part from my story and added 2 different scenarios. The first one is my main character is waking up in a new place and she fills the reader in on what happened. And the #2 is just not using the dream and just continuing the story.
Also I know that it isn’t perfect and there r errors and such. So just skip over that.
I turned my computer off and stared once again at the moon. I sighed. I had nothing else to do, there was nothing great on the TV tonight and I was already feeling sleepy. I walked over to dresser and picked out a pink top with lime green pants to sleep in. I laid them on my bed as I was untying my converses. I kick them off and walked towards my bathroom to take a shower. The warm water was refreshing and once I got out my tiredness seemed to somewhat vanish. I wrapped my drench reddish-brown hair in a towel and then brush my teeth. I yawned as I walked sluggishly to my room. I made my bed and slid under the warm comforter. It didn’t take long for me to fall asleep as a drifted away from reality.
The sun was able to creep throw my parted curtains to let me know it was morning. Once awaken I couldn’t go back to sleep, but I was happy just the same because my dream was over. For the past three weeks my dreams keep reminding what was to be my last dinner with my parents. My eyes were now open trying to familiarize myself with my room. The walls weren’t pale green but a bright yellow that light the room as it reflected back at the sun. I sat up looking through my window, it was sunny outside.
Looking back, I had spent the rest of that week occupying myself…….
OR
I turned my computer off and stared once again at the moon. I sighed. I had nothing else to do, there was nothing great on the TV tonight and I was already feeling sleepy. I walked over to dresser and picked out a pink top with lime green pants to sleep in. I laid them on my bed as I was untying my converses. I kick them off and walked towards my bathroom to take a shower. The warm water was refreshing and once I got out my tiredness seemed to somewhat vanish. I wrapped my drench reddish-brown hair in a towel and then brush my teeth. I yawned as I walked sluggishly to my room. I made my bed and slid under the warm comforter. It didn’t take long for me to fall asleep as a drifted away from reality.
My weekend has gone by quickly as expected. I had spent the my weekend occupying myself……